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Oral bac notion Lieux et formes de pouvoir
Bonjour,
je passe l'oral lundi; je souhaite être corrigée s'il vous plait pour que je puisse me mettre à apprendre mes fiches.
Merci de bien vouloir m'aider à corriger.
Today I have to deal with the concept of place and form of power. In politics and social science, power is the ability to influence people's behavior. In order to live together members of a community accept rules, regulations, and laws. This helps to create social cohesion but can also lead to conflicts and tensions. Even when authority seems absolute, there are always counter-powers which question it, aim at limiting its excesses and resist it. To illustrate this notion, I have chosen to focus on South African places and forms of power. How can people from different cultures live together in harmony?
First I will show how apartheid was put in place and I will highlight the opposition of this form of power. Eventually, I will relate the burying of apartheid and the difficult creation of a harmonious nation in spite of different cultures.
We began bu studying the establishment of Apartheid in South Africa. It was set by the National Party, which won the election in nineteen forty-Eight (1948). It led to a brutally codified segregation between Blacks, Asians, Colored people and Whites who took advantage of the formers. Many Afrikans, who did not work for white people where packed in Bantustans, which were poorly equipped and were far away from the major cities ; while those who worked for Whites had to leave in townships such as Soweto and needed passbooks to get into “white cities”. This law aimed at creating a separate nationhood.
Moreover we interpreted a picture taken in the nineteen sixty (1960) where black South Africans are burning their passbooks, which have come to represent white domination and seem relieved as if they were regaining their freedom. By the same token, a demonstration in Sharpeville where people protested against passbooks and for an increase of their incomes, turned into a slaughter. Indeed sixty-nine (69) black persons were killed so that Sharpeville became a symbol of the unfair white power. Nelson Mandela, which represented a counter power because he struggled tirelessly for egalitarianism, was put in jail and regarded as a political prisoner.
When Mandela walked out of jail and became the first democratically elected president in nineteen ninety-four (1994), he aimed at building a new South Africa that would be democratic, non-racist and non-sexist. As well as writing a new constitution which proclaims the recognition of black people’s rights, he and set Truth and Reconciliation Commission. He fostered forgiveness over vengeance and his will to create a unified and harmonious Rainbow Nation.
Since his mandate, a black middle-class has been emerging. Besides, politics is no longer the preserve of the whites.
To conclude, people from different cultures can nowadays live together in harmony thanks to a long and painful fight for equality led by honorable persons. It is true that there have been major political and social advances in South Africa; however issues about both corruption and fraud are lasted. Furthermore economic power is still unequally distributed a widening gap between the rich and the poor is still observable as we could see in the district of Cape town area.
Bonjour,
je passe l'oral lundi; je souhaite être corrigée s'il vous plait pour que je puisse me mettre à apprendre mes fiches.
Merci de bien vouloir m'aider à corriger.
Today I have to deal with the concept of place and form of power. In politics and social science, power is the ability to influence people's behavior. In order to live together members of a community accept rules, regulations, and laws. This helps to create social cohesion but can also lead to conflicts and tensions. Even when authority seems absolute, there are always counter-powers which question it, aim at limiting its excesses and resist it. To illustrate this notion, I have chosen to focus on South African places and forms of power. How can people from different cultures live together in harmony?
First I will show how apartheid was put in place and I will highlight the opposition of this form of power. Eventually, I will relate the burying of apartheid and the difficult creation of a harmonious nation in spite of different cultures.
We began bu studying the establishment of Apartheid in South Africa. It was set by the National Party, which won the election in nineteen forty-Eight (1948). It led to a brutally codified segregation between Blacks, Asians, Colored people and Whites who took advantage of the formers. Many Afrikans, who did not work for white people where packed in Bantustans, which were poorly equipped and were far away from the major cities ; while those who worked for Whites had to leave in townships such as Soweto and needed passbooks to get into “white cities”. This law aimed at creating a separate nationhood.
Moreover we interpreted a picture taken in the nineteen sixty (1960) where black South Africans are burning their passbooks, which have come to represent white domination and seem relieved as if they were regaining their freedom. By the same token, a demonstration in Sharpeville where people protested against passbooks and for an increase of their incomes, turned into a slaughter. Indeed sixty-nine (69) black persons were killed so that Sharpeville became a symbol of the unfair white power. Nelson Mandela, which represented a counter power because he struggled tirelessly for egalitarianism, was put in jail and regarded as a political prisoner.
When Mandela walked out of jail and became the first democratically elected president in nineteen ninety-four (1994), he aimed at building a new South Africa that would be democratic, non-racist and non-sexist. As well as writing a new constitution which proclaims the recognition of black people’s rights, he and set Truth and Reconciliation Commission. He fostered forgiveness over vengeance and his will to create a unified and harmonious Rainbow Nation.
Since his mandate, a black middle-class has been emerging. Besides, politics is no longer the preserve of the whites.
To conclude, people from different cultures can nowadays live together in harmony thanks to a long and painful fight for equality led by honorable persons. It is true that there have been major political and social advances in South Africa; however issues about both corruption and fraud are lasted. Furthermore economic power is still unequally distributed a widening gap between the rich and the poor is still observable as we could see in the district of Cape town area.
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Today I have to deal with the concept of "place and form of power". In politics and social science, power is the ability to influence people's behavior. In order to live together members of a community accept rules, regulations, and laws. This helps to create social cohesion but can also lead to conflicts and tensions. Even when authority seems absolute, there are always counter-powers which question it, aim at limiting its excesses and resist it. To illustrate this notion, I have chosen to focus on South African places and forms of power. How can people from different cultures live together in harmony? (you can add: we can ask ourselves)
First I will show how apartheid was put in place and I will highlight the opposition of this form of power. Eventually, I will relate (or illustrate) the burying of apartheid and the difficult creation of a harmonious nation in spite of different cultures.
We began by studying the establishment of Apartheid in South Africa. It was set by the National Party, which won the election in nineteen forty-Eight (1948). It led to a brutally codified segregation between (among the..) Blacks, Asians, Colored people (refers to the non-White that you have already mentioned) and Whites (who took advantage of the former). Many Africans, who did not work for white people where packed in Bantustans, which were poorly equipped and were far away from the major cities ; while those who worked for Whites had to live in townships such as Soweto and needed passbooks to get into the “white cities”. This law aimed at creating a separate nationhood.
Moreover (used when further emphasizing a point-it's not applicable here) In class we interpreted a picture taken in the nineteen sixty (1960) where black South Africans are burning their passbooks, which represented the white domination over them, and they seem relieved as if they were regaining their freedom. By the same token, a demonstration in Sharpeville where people protested against passbooks and for an increase of their incomes, turned into a slaughter. Indeed sixty-nine (69) black people were killed and due to that, Sharpeville became a symbol of the unfair white power. Nelson Mandela, who represented a counter power, because he struggled tirelessly for egalitarianism, was put in jail and regarded as a political prisoner.
When Mandela walked out of jail and became the first democratically elected president in nineteen ninety-four (1994), he aimed at building a new South Africa that would be democratic, non-racist and non-sexist. As well as writing a new constitution which proclaims the recognition of black people’s rights, he set up the Truth and Reconciliation Commission. He fostered forgiveness over vengeance and his will to create a unified and harmonious Rainbow Nation.
Since his mandate, a black middle-class has been emerging. Besides, politics is no longer the preserve of the whites.
To conclude, people from different cultures can nowadays live together in harmony thanks to a long and painful fight for equality led by honorable persons. It is true that there have been major political and social advances in South Africa; however, issues about both corruption and fraud have persisted. Furthermore economic power is still unequally distributed and a widening gap between the rich and the poor is still observable as is witnessed in the district of Cape town area.
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You have great writing skills.
Work on your punctuation and adverbs such as 'moreover'.
Great flow too; you can really write.