Oral : Idea of progress Bonsoir, J'ai préparé un texte pour mon oral d'anglais et j'aurais aimé savoir si quelqu'un pouvait le corriger s'il vous plait? Vu mon
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Oral : Idea of progress
Bonsoir,
J'ai préparé un texte pour mon oral d'anglais et j'aurais aimé savoir si quelqu'un pouvait le corriger s'il vous plait? Vu mon niveau il doit y avoir pas mal de fautes donc je remercie d'avance tout ceux qui prendront le temps de corriger mon texte. Merci beaucoup!
I'm going to present the notion "Idea of progress". This notion can be defined as an improvement, a technical, scientific or social advance which contributes to making the world a better place. Progress implies changes, some evolution from an old order to a new order. In a first part we talk about technological progress (as social networks, smartphone and theire abilitys) and after, in a second part we are present the new transport (plane or car). But what progress are change our daily life?
To begin, i would like to present the smartphone of today. With this device, you can contact an other person, go to social networks, play, download music, use a gps... Today, smartphone are an other part of us. We are not feeling good when it's not in our pocket because we having the impression are deconnected of the world. We are in some ways "addict". Moreover, in class we are study a text about the addictions of smartphone and social networks "One hundred tweets of solitude" write in 2011. This article comes to an American magazine: Newsweek. This text explains we can't live without it. Add Twitter, Facebook, and the rest of our social-media obsessions to the mix, and the technology that was supposed to simplify our lives has become the ultimate time-suck. According to the text, teen spends more than seven hours a day using technological devices, plus an additional hour just text-messaging friends. We don't see the importance of this devices take in our life.
In a second part, i would like to talk about the transport progress. Since many years, the transport are very evolued. For exemple, before we move in barouche. There are not engine, the transport move just tranks to the strenght of horse. Today it's totally different. Now we have car and plane and we can do the tour of world. This transport can carry many person far away. It's very practics!
To conclude, i think the progress are a very good thing. Thanks to that, we can go to an other contry, talk with everybody and keep contact.
Bonsoir,
J'ai préparé un texte pour mon oral d'anglais et j'aurais aimé savoir si quelqu'un pouvait le corriger s'il vous plait? Vu mon niveau il doit y avoir pas mal de fautes donc je remercie d'avance tout ceux qui prendront le temps de corriger mon texte. Merci beaucoup!
I'm going to present the notion "Idea of progress". This notion can be defined as an improvement, a technical, scientific or social advance which contributes to making the world a better place. Progress implies changes, some evolution from an old order to a new order. In a first part we talk about technological progress (as social networks, smartphone and theire abilitys) and after, in a second part we are present the new transport (plane or car). But what progress are change our daily life?
To begin, i would like to present the smartphone of today. With this device, you can contact an other person, go to social networks, play, download music, use a gps... Today, smartphone are an other part of us. We are not feeling good when it's not in our pocket because we having the impression are deconnected of the world. We are in some ways "addict". Moreover, in class we are study a text about the addictions of smartphone and social networks "One hundred tweets of solitude" write in 2011. This article comes to an American magazine: Newsweek. This text explains we can't live without it. Add Twitter, Facebook, and the rest of our social-media obsessions to the mix, and the technology that was supposed to simplify our lives has become the ultimate time-suck. According to the text, teen spends more than seven hours a day using technological devices, plus an additional hour just text-messaging friends. We don't see the importance of this devices take in our life.
In a second part, i would like to talk about the transport progress. Since many years, the transport are very evolued. For exemple, before we move in barouche. There are not engine, the transport move just tranks to the strenght of horse. Today it's totally different. Now we have car and plane and we can do the tour of world. This transport can carry many person far away. It's very practics!
To conclude, i think the progress are a very good thing. Thanks to that, we can go to an other contry, talk with everybody and keep contact.
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1. Réponse monalisakelly78
I'm going to present the notion "Idea of progress". This notion can be defined as an improvement, a technical, scientific or social advance which contributes to making the world a better place. Progress implies changes, some evolution from an old order to a new order. In a first part we talk about technological progress (as social networks, smartphone and THEY'RE ABILITIES ) and after, in a second part we are present the new transport (plane or car). But what progress will change our daily life?
To begin, I would like to present the TODAY'S SMARTPHONE. With this device, you can contact ANOTHER person, go ON social networks, play, download music, use a GPS... Today, smartphoneS are A part of us. We are not feeling good when it's not in our pocket because WE'RE having the impression THAT WEN ARE DISCONNECTED of the world. We are in some ways "addict". MOREVER, in class we study TEXTES about the addictions of SMARTPHONES and social networks "One hundred tweets of solitude" WRITTEN in 2011. This article comes FROM an American magazine: Newsweek. This text explains we can't live without it. Add Twitter, Facebook, and the rest of our social-media and the rest of our social-media obsessions to the mix, and the technology that was supposed to simplify our lives has become the ultimate time-suck. According to the text, TEENS SPEND more than seven hours a day using technological devices, plus an additional hour just text-messaging friends. We don't see the importance THAT this devices take in our life.
In a second part, I would like to talk about the transport progress. Since many years, the transport HEAVED EVOLVED ALLOT. For EXAMPLE, before we move in Baruch. There are not engine, the transport move just THANKS to the STRENGTH of horse. Today it's totally different. Now we have CARS and PLANES and WE CAN DO THE WORLD TOUR. This transport can carry many PEOPLE far away. It's very PRACTICAL!
To conclude, I think the progress IS a very good thing. Thanks to that, we can go to other COUNTRY'S, talk with everybody and keep contact.
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