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Oral bac notion Lieux et formes de pouvoir
Bonjour
j'ai mes oraux mercredi prochain; je fais des fiches mais je ne sais pas trop comment faire, pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger mes fautes s'il vous plait? Merci beaucoup pour votre attention.
Location and forms of power
In politics and social science, power is the ability to influence the behavior of people. In order to live together members of a community accept rules, regulations, laws. This helps to create social cohesion but can also lead to conflicts and tensions. Even when authority seems absolute, there are always counter-powers which question it, aim at limiting its excesses and resist it.
We are going to concentrate on the British empire and explain :
Firslty, we studied video « rise and fall of britsh empire » , in the video the britsh empire lasting five hundred years, he imposed white supremacy, he have superpower and check a big part of trade for exemple tea, sugar or gold, . It show evolution the british empire.
The white suprematice is falling because world, peoples evolve and exchange, colonies, slaves want equality so the british empire becomes commonwealth, this is organization that defend the humans right, that is for peace and equality, commonwealth is like European union, USA. The british empire exchange from domination to cooperation.
Whereas empire evolve, much people think yet white supremacy and do not accept equality as document « the dark continent » shows a white lady who visite a independant colonies and she insult a black teacher, she thinks superior but teacher defends itself and humiliates white lady.
Indeed today, they exist people thinking to be upper for example hitler and nazis or all racist, this people don't evolve with time and don't accept change, unlike the britsh empire.
The Commonwealth is organisation with 51 countries, the record audio « more about the commonwealt » explains commonwealth is organization based on humains values, offer independance for colonies and other countries, but global population liberate, use english as their walking langage. They recognize the Queen as their head of state. They all participate in the « commonwealth game » similar to the olympic game. When the britsh empire became the commonwealth, world also change because he has big influence on everybody, we lived currently in the peace without inequality and humans rights important.
To finish according to me the British empire is known how to make evolve its domination according to times and is to adapt in change of the world, the people undergoing this domination also have to evolve but this notion does not amount only to the British empire when we speak about place and shape of power one can speak power of the man on woman and the power of the media.
Bonjour
j'ai mes oraux mercredi prochain; je fais des fiches mais je ne sais pas trop comment faire, pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger mes fautes s'il vous plait? Merci beaucoup pour votre attention.
Location and forms of power
In politics and social science, power is the ability to influence the behavior of people. In order to live together members of a community accept rules, regulations, laws. This helps to create social cohesion but can also lead to conflicts and tensions. Even when authority seems absolute, there are always counter-powers which question it, aim at limiting its excesses and resist it.
We are going to concentrate on the British empire and explain :
Firslty, we studied video « rise and fall of britsh empire » , in the video the britsh empire lasting five hundred years, he imposed white supremacy, he have superpower and check a big part of trade for exemple tea, sugar or gold, . It show evolution the british empire.
The white suprematice is falling because world, peoples evolve and exchange, colonies, slaves want equality so the british empire becomes commonwealth, this is organization that defend the humans right, that is for peace and equality, commonwealth is like European union, USA. The british empire exchange from domination to cooperation.
Whereas empire evolve, much people think yet white supremacy and do not accept equality as document « the dark continent » shows a white lady who visite a independant colonies and she insult a black teacher, she thinks superior but teacher defends itself and humiliates white lady.
Indeed today, they exist people thinking to be upper for example hitler and nazis or all racist, this people don't evolve with time and don't accept change, unlike the britsh empire.
The Commonwealth is organisation with 51 countries, the record audio « more about the commonwealt » explains commonwealth is organization based on humains values, offer independance for colonies and other countries, but global population liberate, use english as their walking langage. They recognize the Queen as their head of state. They all participate in the « commonwealth game » similar to the olympic game. When the britsh empire became the commonwealth, world also change because he has big influence on everybody, we lived currently in the peace without inequality and humans rights important.
To finish according to me the British empire is known how to make evolve its domination according to times and is to adapt in change of the world, the people undergoing this domination also have to evolve but this notion does not amount only to the British empire when we speak about place and shape of power one can speak power of the man on woman and the power of the media.
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Location and forms of power
In politics and social science, power is the ability to influence the behavior of people. In order to live together members of a community accept rules, regulations and laws (use the conjunction 'and' to end the list). This helps to create social cohesion but can also lead to conflicts and tensions. Even when authority seems absolute, there are always counter-powers which question it, aim at limiting its excesses and resist it.
We are going to concentrate on the British empire and explain : (the sentence is hanging, complete it)
Firslty (first is a better option), we studied a video "rise and fall of British ( name of a country begins with a capital letter) empire" (use quotation marks) , in the video the British empire lasting five hundred years, it (he is only used when referring to a human being or an animal that has been previously mentioned or implied) imposed white supremacy, was a superpower and controlled a big part of trade for example tea, sugar and (or implies instead of sugar they would supply gold) gold, . It shows (continuous present tense in context to the sentence) evolution the British empire.
The white supremacist is falling because world, people (people has no plural and rather it is the plural of person) evolve and exchange, colonies, slaves want equality so the British empire becomes commonwealth, this is organization that defend the humans right, that is for peace and equality, commonwealth is like European union, USA (make the points clearer: the white supremacy failed because the world population evolved and most of the slaves demanded for equality. Hence, the British embrace equality and formed the common wealth, an organization that defended human rights and fights for peace and equality. It is the equivalence of the European Union and the USA in terms of its policies.). The British empire exchange (exchange is an act of trading one thing for another and can't be used in this context. Rather you use "transitioned") from domination to cooperation.
Whereas empire evolved, many people are still holding on to white supremacy and do not accept equality as the (use it to particularize this specific document) document "the dark continent" shows. In it we see a white lady who visits an independent colonies and insults a black teacher, she thinks she is more superior but the teacher defends itself(herself, itself is used for inanimate objects) and humiliates the (used to emphasize that you are still referring to the particular person) white lady.
Indeed today, there still exists people who think (use same tense throughout the sentence) they are more superior for example, Hitler and the Nazis (names begin with capital letters) or all racist, these people don't evolve with time and don't accept change, unlike the British empire.
The Commonwealth is an organisation with 51 countries, the audio record "more about the commonwealth" explains that the (particularizing the organization as it was earlier mentioned) commonwealth is organization based on human values, that offers independence for colonies and other countries, but the global population liberated use English as their working language. They recognize the Queen as their head of state. They all participate in the "commonwealth game" similar to the Olympic (name of an event has to begin with a capital letter) game. When the British empire became the commonwealth, the entire world also changed because it had a big influence on everybody (it is very key to maintain the same tense throughout the sentence). Currently we live in peace without inequality (discrimination) and humans rights are considered to be important.
To finish (to conclude. Finish implies to stop) according to me (in my view) the British empire knew how to maintain its domination according to times and to adapt in accordance with change in the world. The people undergoing this domination also have to evolve however this notion is not only restricted to the British empire but when we speak about place and shape of power, one can speak of the power of the men over women or the power of the media.